United States • 73 y/o • MaleReviews Received
A humorous take on awkward social situations. Clad in mobster-flair and godfather kinda crime fiction comedy.
``Now, I have so much not to review on masterpieces making me pale in envy?´´ ;-) A little overstatement.
That was great. I found it rather comical at the end. Well done.
That was awesome. A great twist at the end. Well done.
The part about the cheif and his morning coffee was funny.
Very clever! Nothing like getting one over on the ghost.
I like your descriptions of the characters and of the setting. If I'd written it I'd have tried to prepare for the twist without giving too much away.
I'd mention a small ball lying in a corner of the sitting room. Voss could think the old lady has a granchild who called and forgot to take the ball home. Then at the end she says "Arthur's not my husband, he's my cat. That's his ball in the corner." That prepares for the twist without making it too obvious.
The captain stealing Vosse's thunder rings true.
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That was a great story. Well done.