Reviews Received
Wow!! The way that you wrote this really just gave it a beat! I can imagine your poem being a song or something :0
this is really good
EEEEEEEEEEEK I love this
I really liked it, you rhymed very well.
I really like this. Great job
That "I feel like an ocean filled up with emotion" was probably my favorite line, idk why.. it just stood out lol. And i think this really portrays how I might feel after some intrusive thoughts. Nice job
I can feel the deep emotion of conflict in this poem. "suicide is on my mind" in stanza 2 is an example of the effect. It also seems like the speaker is struggling with relationship. The shifting subjects about love and anguish shows the struggle. Although it is hard to understand the meaning at first reading, the overall theme of conflict in relationship is clearly communicated.