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Do You Miss Me, Too? Reviews

4 reviews have given an average rating of 4.8 out of 5 Stars
_ashidori
π”žπ”°π”₯𝔦𝔑𝔬𝔯𝔦_ gave a rating of 5

I can 100% relate to it. You captured the essence of a toxic relationship perfectly. You think someone is right for you, you really enjoy their company, and they leave like nothing happened. I love this. βœ¨πŸŒΈπŸŒ™

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-Lynnyan-
-Lynnyan- Thank you! I've never felt this at all, so I'm glad I captured it correctly. Thanks for your feedback, it means a lot!
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xXGLB-LifeStudioXx
xXGLB-LifeStudioXx gave a rating of 5

*Claps* This was so sad, but yet a lovely writing, I understand everything, keep up the work, it’s wonderful!

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-Lynnyan-
-Lynnyan- Thank you! That means so much to me ^-^
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xXGLB-LifeStudioXx
xXGLB-LifeStudioXx No problem!
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Darkness
darkthoughts gave a rating of 5

my heart- (ik what u mean, by it never happened to you, but wrote it, that's me in a couple of words, anyway moving on to what I'm writing this for-) this was really good, Lyn. All those short sentences really put this all together. The simple sentences really puts an emotional effect on the reader, your word choices were really effective and rhymed in a weird way.
PERFECTTT





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-Lynnyan-
-Lynnyan- Aww, thank you! That means so much to me <3
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darkthoughts
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darkthoughts
darkthoughts JusT true facts-
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NorthernPhoenix
NorthernPhoenix gave a rating of 4

I thought that this was pretty good. I liked the short stanzas, and I liked the feel of it. One suggestion I would make is in regards to one particular stanza where the last word in one line is "could" and the first word in the next line is "be". I would move the word "could" to the beginning of the first line. This would make it feel like each line is more of a complete idea on its own, and it would help them match the other lines more fluidly. Other than that, good work!

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-Lynnyan-
-Lynnyan- Thank you so much for the suggestion! I will put it into play right away
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