My Fan-Fic (Part 2) Reviews
2 reviews have given an average rating of 4.5 out of 5 Stars
y'know, it's not bad :) there are a few run on sentences and you repeated yourself a little bit, but nobody is perfect!
- Ophelia
This is great! You did rly good! I think you could be a bit more descriptive, though. When you wrote "they stopped hugging," I felt you could put a bit more into that. Maybe something along the lines of, "they immediately pulled away, giving nervous chuckles." Other than that, you did really, really well! Keep writing, you're going somewhere!
You do know that right?