United States • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Dude. Aaron. Hermano.
You got me with this one.
The words and how it flows, the structure of the sentences, like dang son. You got words, style and rhythm that can grab anyone's attention.
I also like the whole idea of how you made a piece of string more than a piece of string as it can be transformed into something beautiful.
P.S: You could totally rap this poem.
i think we all need an angel to come and save us. preach.
I like the change up you put into your writing.
That was so cool. I liked that you made the wolf less intimidating than the rabbit. But now I don't really want a pet bunny. Hah :)
This was really neat :) I like how you made the storytelling into like a staircase. One step at a time with each conflicting occurrence, it all came together.
I love this. Such a crappy end for someone so talented. It was great to read about his life as I didn't know much about him previously. The tribute to him in their S&M2 concert was awesome. Thanks so much for sharing this.
Truly so many untold stories inside of this beautiful earth. I really like the delicate beauty of Aurora borealis described as a scar demanding to be seen, as a wild spirit burning across the sky. Really good subtlety here. I also liked the stanza about blood and how the darkness of things can cause a fire in us.
also, I looked up Haŋhépi Ižáŋžaŋ and all I found was a recipe for pudding (not sure how that correlated) but I like how it's unknown to me. It adds to the mystery of earths' treasures painted in the poem.
I'm not sure what the title means, but damn... this is good.