I like the message you have in this, "The art of self deflecting is dangerous and will swallow you whole if you don't grab a hold of it." That is a true line we should all know of.
Darkness is one of the strongest forces in the universe to make us lost, but light can peer through showing us some direction where we are going.
Again, with some music based stuff for how you bring up God in this writing, it reminds me of the song "Love Me" by a Christian Metal band, Holy Soldier, that hits the meaning home for me when these lyrics are brought in,
"I've died inside
Open my eyes
God, are You still there?
It's up to You
To see me through"
I'll also check out Passion.
Sorry that this comment is a little long.
Life is full of knife twisting. It's our job heal the wounds before it's too late.
So what you're saying is like the song by the Heavy Metal group Dio with the song, "Stand Up and Shout".
I like it
If Odd was playing along to the Metal ballad "Keep Holding On" by Wasp, that would be perfect because that song has the bongos.
Great idea for a story.
We all wish for these things and wish these things would exist. Truth is, it is out there, it's a shame that it is hiding though.
Some grammar threw me off for a bit, but I didn't let it bother me from the idea.
This is sad. After reading this I thought about the book and movie "A Walk To Remember" and felt the same emotions as this story did for me. 😢
I liked how you presented the idea of a loss happening making it true to it's experience and the reminiscence of it.
Humans. The most social organism on the planet and an organism that depends on others.
Sometimes you gotta lay love on the line. An English band named "Shy" best well says the story of this with their song, "Love On The Line".