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AaronTheRocker

AaronTheRocker is from US United States • 22 y/o • Male

"No one here gets out alive." - Jim Morrison

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Ceasebury: Chapter One by Mitzi Danielson-Kaslik

Ah, this reminds me of The Great Gatsby and Gone With The Wind (for some unknown reason). This is definitely a writing style that fits the atmosphere and scenery. Short, but filled with image and explanation that gives the story the guidance it needs.
For this being a genre that doesn't really intrigue me, it really helped me recall the dots of what I have read previously of this style and made connections to sense what is about to or may happen which is nice because I can feel the intensity of the characters minds and actions and the story-line (so far) and this is just the first chapter.
Many more "wants" await the readers ahead for the next chapters to come along.

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The Chase by Abbymo22

Dang.
I like the concept of the story and I like how it moves fast as it pertains to the idea of the title being a "chase", but I feel it went too fast.
There is a beginning, middle and end, of course, yet I believe there is some missing material that would enhance the story such as a strong build-up describing actions that take place in the middle and further questioning/back-of-the-mind fear for the character that can settle at the end. The beginning was pretty darn neat and I like that it was straight to the point/action.

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Night Terror by Abbymo22

Alright.
This is totally classic horror right here. Reminds me of something that would be an episode of Night Gallery and Twilight Zone.
To have a dream and process through it as if it were real to then come to the conclusion that it may have actually happened.

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Tiny Heartbeat by Amber Jones

Oh how true this is.
To take away life that is made in oneself is to not only reject their life, but a part of your's also.

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Gradually by M D Smith IV

The comparisons of the abstract idea is amazing.
'Sharp tines scratching the black board', 'bug in a spider's web'- those are great connections .
You had me making all these connections and seeing what is happening, but then the ending came and it sort of threw me off the rails.
I believe if you took out, "She was gone" and then had "Never to return again" be the last phrase by itself for the ending, it would spark that emotion of one unique kind of love has vanished.
Overall, it was great.

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Five-Tooth Woman by Thomas Ray

An interesting concept for a story.
It reminds me of a classic horror film where a haunted castle (in this case, a shack) is high on the rocks in the sea mixed with Coraline vibes.

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Killing the Earth by Nugget

Agree with the idea that we should be protecting the environment, but there are some obvious aspects in this writing/song that make it 'misleading' (if that's an appropriate term to use).

First, looking at the wrong problem. California wildfires are bad and detrimental to those who live there, but they are natural and at the rate it is going it is actually helping nature. Geography and climate-temperament plays a role because it is just a drier place that is able to grow vegetation that will later on most likely burn because of the lack of water/dry season. Most of California forests are overgrown and no life is able to live because of high canopies which block out sunlight to the floor, diseased and dying plants leaving behind dry/dead material that doesn't decompose because of the shedding of water that mostly only hits the canopies and lack of diversity in the eco-system. With the wildfires they are having now, it actually will help the forest and the people living there in the long run because with new growth there is less chance of wildfires and there will be larger attainment of water because the plants growing hold it in.
The real problem to be looking at is illegal cutting and poor farming practices. This problem is relevant in the Amazon. Large amount of forests are being cleared, both legally and illegally for farming which goes nowhere because of irrigation systems that don't work out for them and then they keep clearing the forest out contaminating bodies of water and the soil that results in fires and floods that are extreme and historic usually every couple of years which isn't natural for the area to witness.

Second, twisted-politics. They talk about Trump "turns a blind eye..."Global warming's an expensive little hoax"". For something that tries to make Trump look bad, it actually goes in his favor because when he pulled the US out of the PCA (Paris Climate Agreement) the US did better for reducing emissions than all the other nations in the PCA and the US didn't spend millions upon millions of dollars 'revamping' the economy to be 'eco-friendly' when it turned out that the PCA actually did nothing because no country met their quota for carbon emission rates while the US, which backed out of the deal, went above and beyond reducing rates.

Third, extinction of animals and plants. For there to be evolution, there must be extinction. As for how the world sees extinction today, it seems like a huge deal, but looking back at history, it really isn't that bad. There have been about 6 mass extinctions (including now) throughout the history of earth resulting in about 99.9% percent of all living organisms and there are animals and plants that are adapting right now like fish in the Hudson river which can tolerate chemical-induced waters and elephants now losing tusks as wheat can grow in the cold and produce more grain.
Creatures and plants will adapt to their condition and it is the result of Darwinism and nature.

Although humans and environmental actions do play a role in the change of the climate, nature ultimately has the upper-hand. Nature can and will find a balance. Whether it is at our expense or not, it will find a way.
There are stronger forces out there than humans.

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The Quarry and the Curse by Sepperince

This is an interesting concept to a story. It gives me some strange Harry Potter vibes for some reason (maybe because of the my thought-relation with this and the mermaids). This also taps into my fear of deep dark water so...yeah, spooky.

There were some parts to this story where the grammar got to me so I had to re-read a few parts (that may just be me though) and I need more info on these characters and the backstory on this.

Hope you write more for this story because if this is it, I may just cry because this is something vastly different not just the plot, but structure wise also with the intro and the sizes of paragraphs being consistent with phenomenal breaks.

Nice!

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