Skylar

Wow! This is so good, and so sad!

Wow, you're really good! I read one of your other stories, The Girl Who Is Friends With Everybody, and I loved it. The emotion is really strong in your writing, and it's amazing! I hope you continue writing!

This is so amazing! I love the flow!

This is so beautiful. I've always loved repetition of sentences, they just seem to bring out more emotion, more... I dunno. Just more. Keep writing!

I hate talking to people about my... Problems. Just like you said, I don't understand it myself, so why should they? Why should I trust them with knowledge about my thoughts and feelings when I don't tell even my closest friends?

I love this! It's kind of simple, and kind of stated in a matter of fact way, but I think that helps emotion go through. It's really good!

This is just.. Like, it's so weird, and when I first read it, I just kinda thought it was weird abstract stuff, and while I still kinda think that, it's also got a story that I didn't notice before. Basically, what I'm trying to say is that it makes me smile, but also furrow my brow in confusion.

This is pretty good so far! The main thing about your story that I would fix is that you say her name very often. Personally, I have a problem of saying 'he' or 'she' too often, but you say her name a little too often. It's probably just the one spot at the top of the story ("... Pricking at Aniya's nerves, repeating every few seconds. Aniya's breath...") and it threw me off, making me see her name more prominently, but it bothered me. Sorry for the long criticism. Keep writing!