United Kingdom • 64 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Given that you told most of your story in your introduction I didn't feel that it was necessary for me to read the actual story. Please read my piece 'How to Write a Teaser'. It will be of benefit to you...
Your story sends a strong moral message in an interesting and engaging manner that does not patronise your reader. That is to your credit.
There are some grammar and punctuation errors that need correcting, which your computer's spell-checker and thesaurus will help with.
Overall a good piece. I look forward to reading more from you soon :-)
A couple of silly and unnecessary spelling mistakes spoil and otherwise entertaining and engaging story. Using your computer's spell-check facility will help highlight such errors before submission. Overall, though, very good work.
I really like this short but poignant piece. You express so much feeling in so few words, which is rather skilful. Well done you! :-)
As good as this is, we have seen far too many similar works on the site to make this stand out from a (now rather large) crowd. I would very much like to see you turn your talent to other subjects...
Nicely done, cleverly covering all those unspoken fears we all suffer with from time to time.
A good story well told. However, I found your introduction to the story annoying: I do not like to be told how I will feel before I have even begun to read a story. Please read my piece 'How to Write a Teaser'. You might find it helpful and informative...
An unusual and interesting story which was well told. I like your imagination and your unusual ideas. Well done!
I quite enjoyed the style of your writing. It's innovative and interesting, in spite of the bleak subject matter. I have to admit to being somewhat baffled by your 'author's note' comment... Overall, a commendable effort.