United Kingdom • 64 y/o • MaleReviews Given
So much said in so few words. I like this - a lot!
A nice poem - but take more care with your punctuation. I look forward to reading more of your work in future :-)
Well here's one day when you can feel very much accepted. :-) Good poem.
Interesting poem. Your credits in the 'author's notes' box are unnecessary...
Regrettably not all of your poems follow the true haiku 5-7-5 syllables rule. However, an interesting - if somewhat macabre - collection.
Interesting piece. You would have been better served using the more usual '...' rather than the double-hyphen to indicate pauses. It would also be more aesthetically pleasing. On the whole, though, not bad at all. :-)
Short, simple, effective. Well done!
To be perfectly honest this is not one of your better stories. It is far too short to satisfactorily cover the scope of your idea, which gives it a rushed, clumsy feel.