United States • 20 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
I love the last sentence and such a great short story!!! Love it!
Such a great start to a story! Cant wait to see where this goes!
Don't listen to Andy. Hes completely and totally wrong,this has a wonderfully beautiful message to tell and I love how you used an egg as an example super creative and brilliant. Keep on writing and don't let mean and untrue comments make you stop writing!(And I get that i'm 11 and someone who most people would call immature and not the best writer but whatever I love your story!) There should be a 6 star because this one deserves 6 not 5 stars!
This is such an inspiring sad story! I love it.
This is such a cute poem. Write more you have a great skill!
This is such a sad yet amazing story!
yasssssssssssssssss! you must keep writing! there are grammatical issues but there not huge. anyway keep writing i'm literally DYING TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!
this is such a sad love story. i love the details but does the girl live by herself and also where are her parents? just wondering where are the guys parents in all of this. just next time include a backstory. but i love this piece of writing! i love the ending and it really completes the story and i love how the man is telling this story to the daughter! keep writing you are amazing at it!!!