United States • 4 y/oReviews Received
Uhhh.....
What did I just read?
I'm so lost with words.
But I will say, it definitely is different and there does seem to be a concentrated idea.
So you got that goin' at least.
I really loved your piece of writing. Well done.
I think you're right, that's how they would be treated. It shouldn't be like that but it is.
dude that was really really good!! i love hp...hence my profile name haha
Nice build up. Just the kind of story that makes you want to look over your shoulder . . . or perhaps not! You know that old adage about what you don't know can't hurt you . . . yeah, right!
Don't . . . Look . . . Back . . . Seriously! --- Well done!
The introduction is believable and relatable. I might've put 'what kind of tat they've got me this year, not 'what kind of chaos.' It feels more appropriate for inanimate objects. Othetwise its well written.
As to the wierd developments, much depends on what's coming next before we can judge those. It should encourage fans of fantasy to read on.