Reviews Received
I'd have written 'a huge smile that showed his front teeth were missing,' it feels more fluent.
The opening lines are good, they create tension and raise questions of who this man is and how he comes to be brawling. His relationship with his brother is plausible and you convey it well.
i don't really think that i liked this one i mean i thought it would because it mention love but then when i acaully started reading it that was not what i was expecting on that