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A little farfetched at times, and Sarah seemed like so many other heroines of popular stories (Katniss of the Hunger Games, Hermione of Harry Potter).
I wish that there was a little more diversity for her character, because she just seems to be there to be a supporting character (and not a very interesting or good one at that, eaither) until the end.
Speaking of which, the end was amazing! I wasn't expecting that, and the quote you used is one of my favorites.
Good job, and keep writing!

AND YE DIDNT NOTICE UNTIL MORNING!?

Great! its got that wow factor and is really well written

A really simple idea but it has that 'Oh, my goodness' quality when you realise what caused the catastrophe. Well written, too. Lets see some more like this please.

This story touched my heart because I also lost my grandmother. It happened several years ago but it feels as if it has only been two day. Keep on writing

it's really nice!

this is so sad. my grandad past on in november and i was with him when he past away and when the funeral people brought him to the funeral home.

My own grandmother passed away only a few months ago. I know how you feel. Death is the most painful torture.
Anyway, great work! Keep it up!