eloise2006

You should've used capital letters for God and you forgot it for Snow the first time you mentioned her. That said, its an interesting subject for animal lovers and nature lovers. Keep practising and you'll improve.

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"THE WORLD WRITES AWARDS"
CHIEF EDITOR

I'm giving this five stars because of the heart you put in it. Just the tip of the iceberg of so much policing and oppression against women in this culture. You are worth more than all of it. Thanks for sharing these truths.

I like the repetition you did with the beginning and the end. There were some grammatical errors, such as "..we were told we were pretty but men we didn't know" should by "by men" instead. My favorite lines are "we have been silenced to our opinions" and "we have been told that what we say is wrong." Such a strong and bold piece.

This was a perfect story, I get everything, and the meaning of ‘She did it’, this was sad, but it was a good story too, keep up the writing! Have a nice day! 👋🏽

I feel this poem, good work! This is sad too, and very true to most people, keep up the work!

The story is so beautiful! I wonder what happen to Snow 😯, Maybe she flew home, I get the story! And it’s sad, you did good on the writing, keep up the work! Have a nice day!

this is so sad-
i just- ii mean can you change the ending so its a bit happier-

I almost cried reading this omg.