🌸Fate

The concept you have is a good one but there is too much grammar errors that is hard for me to fully enjoy. Do not fright. I suggest that you ask for an overlook before sumbiting your work to help you out. I do hope to read more of your work in the future. You got this!

-Fate🌸

I love this because of how cute it is. Though, I must admit you need to work out some little things in your story. In my opinion, it was a little too rush for me. The character development was done rather sloppy but it is alright. You are a fantastic writer that will get a hang of it. I really do hope to see you write again.

-Fate🌸

Informative indeed.

I just love dark stories like this, I really do but this story needs a little bit of work which is fine. It has the potential of being better and with more work it can be. So please do write more stories. I am looking forward to it.