United States • 25 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Well... I guess first is this true?
If so thank god for people like you
If not you are an extremely descriptive writer. I felt nearly everything you said and I have really bad empathy for others.
Regardless of weather or not this story is true you did a really great job and I hope you are doing well now and in the future.
I enjoyed reading this. i have never seen anyone rhyme seed so much and make it interesting. great job!
also were you thinking of Dr. Suess when you wrote this? it just has that sort of a feel to it.
1. Great job, there are a few errors here and there but nothing major. Does make you wish it were that easy to fix though.
2. You based this mostly off a comic? I know you said it but still this is mostly off a comic?
I'm confused, why is this bad? Its well written and i actually felt something which is hard for me normally. I didn't catch any major errors and for 14 this is really good. Great Job! Keep writing.
During your free time? This is really good,the pacing of it is really nice cause you don't need to think much and it flows really smooth.Great job!
It is great,for changes that I personally would make it would be erasing the third line. That is just me though and for 12 years old this is really good. Keep it up!
I completely agree that grades mean nothing on a persons worth. This is a great poem
Funnily enough I was planning to write a poem on this...
Well you answered the first question
It flows well and tells of a tragedy and it seems the depression resulting from it
I happen to know well the depression you mention
I've read this 3 times now and can't find anything i would change at all. Good Job.
And I do have to ask is the person you?