United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Nice
Emotions are so important! Nice job.
"Circumstances are nothing in front of your strength"( hope it makes you feel better, it's true though). Keep it up.😇
Sad, true and Beautiful. (I am a fan of rhymes) keep it up.
very good its made me think about life and also who i am as a person
And it is just as I had expected after part one! Again, many spelling and grammatical errors that almost distract the reader from the juice of the story. The character development of the main character is good.
Simple and raw. Very honest and pure with some kind of lingering fire. I, too, am familiar with these family dynamics- just know you're never alone, someone out there is rooting for you and you wouldn't even know.
There were definitely some grammatical errors and spelling, as well as punctuation, but that can be fixed with some adjustments. I can tell this kind of fantasy story is something you like to indulge yourself in and somehow relate to, so that intrigues me a lot. It does seem a bit predictable but I also haven't read the next part yet, so maybe I'll be wrong :) overall, the story line is something of a typical teenage broken outcast surrounded by beautiful people- it may do some good to point out imperfections in the characters and talk about those things to add some more dynamic to the story. I am, however, enticed to read part two!