United Kingdom • 61 y/oReviews Received
This is a great story! You're very talented. I could really feel Jack's guilt when you told me about it. It's sad how people can manage to find ways to tie horrible incidents back to them and claim the incident as their fault. I hope you'll continue writing because you're a natural. Great job!
I finally got the time to read your story and I love it. Misty I hope this family gives you great memories lol.
Like the concept. Old-time feel of a good cliche. It's like Little House on The Prairie style.
Overall, great. With the sequencing of events and how you described them, they seem cut-off. Instead of a steady consistent flow, it is stop-and-go in some areas. Not to much, but recognizable, at least in my opinion.