United Kingdom • 61 y/oReviews Given
I like the metephores of the heron and the airport terminal.
Not 'too' far away rather than 'not to far away.'
'Blood was seeping into the snow' rather than 'blood was fading into the snow.' It would trickle down rather than turn pale.
Had you described the man flailing trying to retrieve his lost knife before striking back, then the action would've flowed better. You're descriptions of the fight are tense and fast moving, but bear in mind what I've written and you're writing will improve.
An intriguing, passionate start. Time will show how it develops, but the first two instalments should draw people in.
You do a good job of evoking the forest and the cycle of decay and renewal.
I can sympathise. Its especially hard in a lockdown as there's no work/school/university to take our minds off things.
There are so many issues in the news its impossible for one person to tackle them all. If you can't fix everything don't be hard on yourself.
I like the way you spell out 'I'm fine' with initial letters of negative emotions.
A well written piece with a touch of mystery about the heroine.
Being self-critical is usually good, it spurs us on to do the best we can. The trouble is society and peer group pressure can set impossibly high expectations, and that can lead to mental health issues. Going too far one way or another is easy, but it isn't always easy to strike a balance between trying too hard and giving up.