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I hope its good news for you.

This is a good introduction, it raises a big question while plunging us into a difficult situation for the narrator.

When it comes to the rift between mother and daughter, you could describe other differences besides dress sense. Do they disagree over religion or politics? Has mother betrayed father? Perhaps these issues will become apparent later on.

You caught a plausible situation in a few paragraphs.

As with the first part, you evoke your characters' emotions well.

You make a good point about people's prejudices against outsiders and anyone who looks different. Let me offer a little constructive criticism.

Hiding from the sun under a large oak reads better than hiding under a large oak from the sun.

If Moss is a plant based life form he should ooze sap not blood as he dies. Perhaps blood is more dramatic but sap is more consistent. Plants drained of sap die just as people drained of blood do.

A good opening and a nice twist.

Your descriptions are good but you could add a little more tension. If the kitten tries to run and Amy looses sight of it she could go home, get a piece of fish or chicken and lay it down where the animal was. Then after an anxious wait it could return, drawn by the scent of food and this time let Amy take it. A little more difficulty would make a more interesting story.
Its a good choice of subject.
I've got a cat story on page 11 of this site, 'Misty's Cry,' and there are more besides.

I like your descriptions and your treatment of a difficult subject. Not everyone will agree with the parent's beliefs but many would relate to their situation.

I suspected that girl in a coma and girl on the balcony were the same before the big reveal but your writing shows promise.