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A well written piece with a touch of mystery about the heroine.

This is a moving and thoughtful piece, I enjoyed it. It didn't need to be scary.

I'd have written 'a huge smile that showed his front teeth were missing,' it feels more fluent.

The opening lines are good, they create tension and raise questions of who this man is and how he comes to be brawling. His relationship with his brother is plausible and you convey it well.

People can be affected in the way you evoke here. The thing is people don't always show us everything about themselves. Someone can present a perfect image of themselves, at school, work or on social media and have issues or setbacks they don't talk about. Don't think you're alone in failing to measure up.

I enjoyed this story. It soon became clear how it would end, but you evoke the narrator and the animals very well. Most pet owners will relate to it.

This is a vivid evocation of a more innocent time. A lot of mature people will relate to it. Well done.

My mother passed away when I was in my 50s and that was hard enough. It must be worse loosing her when very young yourself. I've learned to get by without her, it took time and help from friends but it can be done. Its hard but possible. I hope you come to terms with your loss.

Coming from a country where the weather is notoriously fickle, I can relate to this. Well done.