Kat

I think it was a great plot line, and the character does seem like she is in the fifties/ a teenager! Great job!

The story is GREAT and the formatting is just fine, I'm on an iPhone, too. I think that the detail is amazing and I couldn't find any errors! Best story read this morning so far!

That was awesome! I love the way that you described everything and know that you are undoubtedly an even more creative writer now that you have the experience and stuff. Wow, that sounded cheap. Anyway, I'm a part of a big (extended) family, with around 40 relatives. I love life sometimes, especially when life involves being awoken by a butt in your face and a sibling telling you they lost the remote. XD sarcasm, life's relief.

Holy life of depression. Wow. That broke my soul. 🤧 Wow.

Oh my gosh. I think I'm obsessed with your writing. Good capture of the details and you make everything seem real, and make a clear picture in my mind. Awesome!

I have officially read everything you have put on your profile so far (because if I read one story from someone and get hooked I can't stop) and right now I think you write a lot of really sad stories. Can I dare you to write a happy one? Just a dare.
Anyway, I love the use of words and the way you describe his backstory and desicion. Gosh that's a sad ending.
-KP

Great job! I love love love it! I've never experienced what the poem is describing but now I had this mini craze a track of frustration and grief. Wow.
-KP

I think Apeman (sorry if I got the name wrong) is partially right. A series of sad stories isn't bad when you know that you can produce happier, livelier stories that make your heart swell or eyes tear. I think that the story was amazing and I know that you continued with it because I saw the titles for the next ones, so good job!
-KP