Kat

Wow!! Touching and wondering!! I have so many unanswered questions, though.
Why did the wife and children disappear? Were they dead before or were they just trying to coax him out of bed from the window? Is that why he got up? Because he wanted to see his wife and kids?
Great job! -KP

This has a true meaning, but sounds a little hasty or rushed, and make me question if you should've made this a poem of not. Though the message is clear and knowing, which I love to see.
-KP

Days like this will come and go, leaving impressions and wounds. You just have to learn how to bandage them and let them become unhurtful scars. Hang in there!
-KP

Wow. That was funny and crazy at the same time. I'm not really sure what to say.... good job?

Wow!!! That is a great plot line!! One problem though. There are a bunch of grammatical gaps or errors and some punctual mistakes.
I also wanted to ask, where are the moments when the girl's friend couldn't speak, had to step back, and come at it a moment later?
Could she be fingering the gun while she talked? That way the audience (readers) would know that something was in her pocket but didn't know what exactly it was. Something like explaining the hard, cold metal would've sufficed.
Great job on the plot line and I am excited to read more of your work!

I think that the concept and feeling that the poem gives is amazing and most definitely wanted!
One thing that you might want to work on is the feeling, the rhythm of the lines. They have to flow together seemlessly, and right now there are a few minor bumps in them.
I love your writing so far and cannot wait to hear more from you!!
-Kat

I love it! The feeling is great and makes the whole concept come to life!
There is one thing you would want to work on, though. It seems like you keep on using the same rhyme a few times more than it is needed. Sometimes when you overuse the same syllable, it makes the reader feel like they are droning.
I love your work so far and cannot wait to read more!
-Kat

Wow! Really good! I love the way you used words that made he setting feel even more suspisious or scary, and you took us into the mind of the wolf cub.
The problem I found was that there was a strange gap between when he cub was sleeping to when he saw his dead sister. How did that happen? Where was the fried or misery?
Doing great! Keep it up!!