Kat

Amazing, showed passion and clearly created the emotions of the poem. It cut deeply into me and I hope that if you're going through that - that everything works out alright. (Animals help a lot)
-KP

Oh my gosh it's so amazing!! Just one editing problem, when you're describing the lady for the first time you accidentally said "he" instead of "she." It was great and depressing at the same time.

Awesome!!

Oh my gosh!! No kidding! I feel that way sometimes. I never really put myself out there. Hope everything turns out ok, just remember, things happen for a reason.
I hate that saying sometimes - but it's true. Thanks!
-KP

I just cried!! There were a few grammar errors, but those can be fixed easily. I have experiance with heartbreak, and the twist at the end left me heartbroken. I actually miss the narrator!
It might be me just being too attached to reading and books. I really want to hear more from you!
Thank you so much!

I think it's great. There are a few things you could work on, but I think that it was amazing! Really brought tears to my eyes and made me stop and think. Thanks for sharing!

I usually don't read things along these lines but the story was well written and left suspense at every corner. The ending was quite unsatisfying; but I believe you did that for a reason. Good job.

This really opens up my mind and makes me think. The world really is a place of horrors and mischief, but you cannot forget the love and beauty. Everything in life can and will be made in a way that will pleasure the human kind, but it is a judge of character to try and avoid the things we know have no profit.
The world has only gotten worse, but as we look around things have also gotten better. A man becomes too drunk to see straight, but his car won't start when he is in that state. A child is abused at home, but there are counselers and helpers standing outside their door, waiting for the call for help.
So even though the world might seem so bad, with every heartbreak there comes a promise. Stay strong!
-KP