United States • 22 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
Smoothly bliss and heatbreaking.
I'd say to continue, for some reason it's catching my attention. The grammar usage was off at times and the techniques can be dull but it's an intriguing story for me, I'd want to know what happens.
Kind and refreshing
Everything fit well for the topic, good use of structure.
It was an intriguing and, for the most part, well-put together story. The trauma was well portrayed. Nice job.
Very true- people seem to enjoy speaking of things they don't know about.
Was quite intriguing... your use of diction to express the confinement of the place was effective. I felt like I had a quick history lesson there. The subtle darkness that lingered behind the words in this story showed though well.
Your words seemed to dance off the page, which went perfectly well with the concept of harmony that you presented in this piece. The line "we co-exist with honesty and integrity" impacted me heavily while reading this. This harmonious song would be perfect, if only presented in a world where the majority of people are God willing. Thanks for sharing your dreams.