LeCat127

Huh. I don't know how to say what I'm thinking, but I like what this story does to make the reader think.

Well, I think I get what you're saying here, at least in my own way. Good prose, by the way.

I've had this problem before. Honestly I don't have any idea what the best course of action is when wanting to say something but being afraid of what will happen if you do, but this certainly captures the uncertainty of the situation.

Holy heck. I feel like my entire life in regards to other people has been summarized here. I kinda consider myself to be an invisible person, and this just... words.
Good writing.

This is a whole mood.

It's so strange to realize that you never do things you used to enjoy. I think maybe the best thing to do is just pick a time to try them out again; make time to see if you can still find joy in the things you like to do. And if not, well. Sleep helps. Finding people to talk to helps.
In the end I suppose it is what it is, eh?

3.5 stars. ;) I like the writing style, and I thought the concept was interesting. This would be a story that I'd enjoy getting to know a few more details of, like why he was stowing away and what happens after he transforms into a merperson.

I agree with what others have said about how the shift in tone is good; it makes it feel like the story is progressing, as we start to see what some of the real issues with the characters' lives are.
I'm intrigued to learn that Raven is the only one of his kind, and I'm curious to see what happens from here.

To add to the mushroom conversation: I got the idea that she was just going on about something she knew, rather than meant to have any special significance. Of course, she could tell Raven about more things besides just the mushrooms, and that might make the point a little better anyway, for the story and the point Arin is trying to make. If that makes sense.