LeCat127

I agree with what others have said about how the shift in tone is good; it makes it feel like the story is progressing, as we start to see what some of the real issues with the characters' lives are.
I'm intrigued to learn that Raven is the only one of his kind, and I'm curious to see what happens from here.

I've had this problem before. Honestly I don't have any idea what the best course of action is when wanting to say something but being afraid of what will happen if you do, but this certainly captures the uncertainty of the situation.

To add to the mushroom conversation: I got the idea that she was just going on about something she knew, rather than meant to have any special significance. Of course, she could tell Raven about more things besides just the mushrooms, and that might make the point a little better anyway, for the story and the point Arin is trying to make. If that makes sense.

I like the role that knowledge plays as a sort of sentient thing in this story, rather than just a fact like you might expect.

This poem tells a really interesting story. I especially like the way it begins, talking about secrets and hiding, and I love the lines "Are you not tired of not being able to be you? Is it because you think it's taboo?" Good work.

I really like the way this story begins. The first paragraph about tragedies has good rhetoric and I find it very interesting.

You write a lot of stories and musings and whatnot that inspire a lot of curiosity in me. It's all vague enough to both be relatable and to make me wonder what things everyone has that make them think things like this.

This is a fun little snippet. It kind of seems like a writing prompt.