lemonslice

I wish you had unpacked this prose poem more. Describe the emotions of being lost in these woods. Juxtapose it with the guy's life outside.

Be bold.

And be mindful of your spelling and grammar.

Nice little piece only spoilt by a scattered number of typos and grammatical errors.

A pretty interesting prose poem, even though it's been done to death a thousand times before. Be mindful of the difference between "then" and "than".

I thought you had some really cool things included here, particularly starting in medias res. But it also reads just like any other on-the-rails zombie story, right? Am I missing something here?

And what does the "cleansing" sign mean? Because that is obviously not something our POV can know anything about, which means you're breaking POV every time you add that sign. You're writing in close 3rd, remember.

Why is it important for the reader to know how many thousands/millions of people die? That's kinda understood if it's an apocalypse, right?

It's a rookie mistake to use sweeping big picture descriptions during large battles and world-changing events in prose. Just focus on our main character and let everything else come naturally. Your writing is pretty good, have more confidence in yourself.

Keep up the writing!

Sad and hopeless and depressing. Why not write something to make you feel better instead?

Does heartache make one a monster? In that case the world is only populated by monsters, which is a bit ... untrue.

I'm really impressed by the story. Well done!

You've got some good stuff there, but I think your poor grammar and punctuation lets your story down. It also takes too long until anything significant happens.