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This is fine descriptive writing and a good coming of age piece. I hope you keep writing like this.

I sincerety hope things get better for you soom Scorp. The word weept should be wept but that's a minor issue. I think you're showing courage and resiliance but I wish yoi didn't have to.

A lot of young people will relate to this. Its quite usual to break up with someone while in your teens. The trouble is, if its your first break up you've nothing to compare it with and no experience of getting over it. Give yourself time to reflect and recover. It won't seem like it now, but there's time to move on and meet someone else.

this was amazing i felt like you could have made the story longer but other then that it was good

but u ATEEE

This really was a terrifying story to tell my friends in the dark for my revenge thanks a lot buddy.

Really helped :D

this is amazing.

A lot of writers feel like this at times. I sometimes do. For a recent story I wstched a documentary about lifeboat crews, then used a similat scenario in my story 'Dark Midwinter Night.' The story took a respectable number of hits but not as many as some of mine and not as many as I hoped for. Pethaps I didn't convey all I wanted to. What do other people think?

That was wonderful. More than I've questioned whether mirrors are portals to parallel dimensions. Whether we humans in this dimension are parallel reflections of those in another. Well done.