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What a brilliant start! But then I got very confused in the fourth section... I think with a little work here, it has the potential to be a great piece of work.
I look forward to reading more.....

Well said

That is so sad Ivy. I hope writing it was therapeutic for you.

I'm just wondering why you classed this as 'religious'?
Anyway, so far so good, I look forward to reading more

What a beautiful story

Very sad story...
How about writing an alternative (hopeful) ending? I'd love to read it if you do.....

please have courage Kkliz
Keep writing, it can be very therapeutic

So so sad..... You are very talented SamZ.
I liked the build up of the story, all except for the last line; I think the ending needs some more work to make it 'complete' I'm sure it will be worth it!