mayanward

Loved it! Please write more! There were some confusing grammar situations in the second paragraph, but besides that, I think you did pretty well!
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-KP

I loved the feeling and emotional roller coaster you put the readers through. There were a few grammar errors:
"So so so" should be "so, so, so"
And so one. But I enjoyed your story and hope to hear more from you!

Wow! This is one of the rare times that a story had left me begging for more! Please continue, I love this!

-Auron

yes write more

uhhhhhh.... More?


PLEASE!!!!!