Mitzi Danielson-Kaslik

I like the term 'brutally hard.' You bring two very different worlds up against each other and the contrast works well.

Just one thing, you refer to the floor and it seems to be outdoors. We usually say 'ground' for the natural earth beneath our feet and 'floor' for a man-made covering. That said, people sometimes refer to the 'forest floor' and the rest of your descriptions are good.

This painted such a great picture of the room, and the emotions..wonderful to read!

I don't usually appreciate poetical prose, but I do really like this. I think you have talent, continue writing.....

I have been here, and in my experience, the only way for it to not be displayed on your profile is if you go to edit it and make it private. I have several repeats....

it was good but (this is going to sound weird but) with future works, maybe try to make the rhyming lines go ABABCDCD... or something like that instead of AABBCCDD because it does give a different feel so idk just try it out, otherwise, l like the words

noice :)