United Kingdom • 21 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
This is incredible! You are so very talented! You deserve so much more than you are receiving. Keep writing and unleashing your creativity, it's beautiful!
This is astonishing!
The deep, thick, heavy imagery is like you are painting a high-detailed moving picture with words to make it mystical and give it the movement that makes it come alive in our brains to create what we see, what we think and feel.
A true work of art.
Just like what Lynnyan said, you are talented and deserve more and the best.
Ah, this reminds me of The Great Gatsby and Gone With The Wind (for some unknown reason). This is definitely a writing style that fits the atmosphere and scenery. Short, but filled with image and explanation that gives the story the guidance it needs.
For this being a genre that doesn't really intrigue me, it really helped me recall the dots of what I have read previously of this style and made connections to sense what is about to or may happen which is nice because I can feel the intensity of the characters minds and actions and the story-line (so far) and this is just the first chapter.
Many more "wants" await the readers ahead for the next chapters to come along.
This is neat.
You created the characters and their relationships right away giving a detailed description of how they are and act leaving little to no blank space.
Wow, I can't wait to see where this is going! I need to know about these men she's being thrust upon in marriage so that I can decide who I like better. But, for now, I'd say that she should marry Gabriella's brother so that she may have a husband as well. You're very talented, keep writing!
Woah, okay, Marquess Ravenswood seems a bit rude, but I'll let that slide. Why won't Dorian be kinder to his sister? It seems the only person who actually cares for her is Theodosia! I swear, boys are so complicated. I feel bad for Dorian, though. if he changed after the death of his mother, he must've had a strong bond with her. I hope I can learn more about Ravenswood in the next chapter. You had a few typos, as well, but I can't remember where, so maybe just go over your writing and fix them. It was a great story though, I'm still very intrigued!
aw, man, i cant do sexual things- let me know when it gets back to normal so I can hop back in tho! For your typos, I suggest Grammarly. It can be wrong sometimes, so u have to keep an eye on it, but most of the time it's really helpful! I don't think Valentine is the right Match for Theodosia. He seems unable to understand the fact that a woman is more than an object, as he said, "Are you going to take advantage of me?" It sounds to me like he just wants to, uh, take advantage of her. I don't really like him. I'm also mad at Dorian now though, for leaving his sister alone for so many years. I hope their relationship can mend. And in the meantime, maybe he can save Theodosia from Valentine's greedy personality.
I've been trying to keep up with this story. it's amazing! very nicely done
- Ophelia