Tetew

Truly heartfelt. No one should have to go through that.
"Remember, hope is a good thing, maybe the best of things, and no good thing ever dies." ~ Stephen King

I really liked the description. Nice job! :)

i like it.don't change anything

'As the would was being nice' should read 'as the world was being nice.'
'I got unconscious' should read 'I fell unconscious.'

Even so, you wrote some good descriptions. I like the line about dancing dolphins. Keep it up and you'll get past mistakes like those above.