Tetew

'As the would was being nice' should read 'as the world was being nice.'
'I got unconscious' should read 'I fell unconscious.'

Even so, you wrote some good descriptions. I like the line about dancing dolphins. Keep it up and you'll get past mistakes like those above.

Truly heartfelt. No one should have to go through that.
"Remember, hope is a good thing, maybe the best of things, and no good thing ever dies." ~ Stephen King

I really liked the description. Nice job! :)

i like it.don't change anything