United States • 24 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
I like the role that knowledge plays as a sort of sentient thing in this story, rather than just a fact like you might expect.
This is the first time I've found how I'm feeling so well described by another person. I understand where you're coming from.
Great work.
as someone with a passion for pretty skies and all forms of carbs, I found this wonderful! Great job <3
In my opinion, this is your best writing so far.
The descriptions are pretty much perfect, and the pictures they painted were pictures I've never seen before. The overall mood was amazing, and the way each twist added another emotion (I almost want to say memory, because I feel like I know this tree's home) it felt so natural, and built up so smoothly!
Stages of grief. I think you did really well. Because I didn't notice while reading, but it makes sense. I've read/seen/written things based on the stages, but it's never felt as cohesive as this, I always saw it coming. This seemed less like borrowing a structure and more like using something inherent to human experience to breathe life into your story. It's so well done!
There is one thing that broke my immersion, and that's the present/past tense... Sometimes it seemed inconsistent and made me confused about who was telling the story, and when.
But overall, this just feels right. It's so well done. I feel like the ending maybe hasn't reached its final form, but it's far from unsatisfying.
And I wish I could give it seven stars. 9.9/10
Still like this.
Excellent. I did notice the stages of grief while I was reading, but it felt smooth. The style was cohesive and I enjoyed the way you depicted how a tree might feel about things and view its life.
