United States • 31 y/oReviews Received
My sisters name is Sara, she actually acts like this...I am SCARED
I feel like the mom was a little harsh at the beginning but the story is really nice!
Well, goodbye soul. Bye emotions, bye mind walls. This story crumbles my mind in a flash, something previously unknown to me in writing. Good job, keep writing!
depressing...but it has a great moral to it
love it
I love depressing stories and this was a great example..!
this was good, but told many times in different versions. well what you added to it was good, it was very vague and very been there done that. i don't mean to offend you, this is just my opinion
Good story line that could if been amazing but your language used was a bit simple. I'm not saying it's bad, just try and use different and interesting language to really have that meaningful effect of the story!