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OMG!! I love this story!! its really good I like the description you used, felt like I was Sara And I felt like i was in the story! ^.^

My sisters name is Sara, she actually acts like this...I am SCARED

Good story line that could if been amazing but your language used was a bit simple. I'm not saying it's bad, just try and use different and interesting language to really have that meaningful effect of the story!

I love depressing stories and this was a great example..!

love it

depressing...but it has a great moral to it

Well, goodbye soul. Bye emotions, bye mind walls. This story crumbles my mind in a flash, something previously unknown to me in writing. Good job, keep writing!

I feel like the mom was a little harsh at the beginning but the story is really nice!