United Kingdom • 54 y/oReviews Received
Funny story. :)
Remember to write out numbers with letters instead. Especially if it's anything lower than a hundred.
Awesome story! Had me hooked from the get go. Nicely done.
Oh JOY!
At last, a contribution that actually ticks all the boxes it promises to. Thank you!
I enjoyed your slightly warped and tongue-in-cheek humour in the story and the contemporary references (which our overseas cousins may not connect with...) Above all, though, you made me SMILE, and that doesn't happen very often with most of what I read here...
I'm very much looking forward to many more of your stories. Can I nominate myself as your No. 1 fan already??? :-)
Green Bin One is a fun short-short story (<1,000 words)! Thanks for contributing it.
I enjoyed the protagonist's perspective on the world ... he's like a more realistic version of Spaceman Spiff from Calvin & Hobbes.
My one complaint is that the first couple of paragraphs are exposition, which makes it a little slower to get into than if the opening showed us real-time action. Moreover, the opening confused me a little and I had to go back and read it a couple of times to comprehend the tongue-in-cheek aspect.
I noticed a few grammatical issues (outside of the intentional misunderstood words), but nothing really serious. It's well written and fun to read! Thanks again!
I liked this story a lot. You accomplished a lot within the space of 900 words. I would like to read more of your work and see what you can do in other formats.
This is such an emotional story I love it! Great job with all of the details!
Neat story!
You could expand upon it ... show us a little more of Timmy's world before he first talks to the bugs, and maybe share a couple of other bug conversations. It's an imaginative story and so why not run with that a bit further?
Thanks for contributing to shortstories101. Well done!
It was a really good story.I really loved it.Please write more stories.