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this deserves an infinity star rating, all of Taylors work does!

Beautiful! Five star, but maybe go through and edit the spelling?
Just the few slip-ups I noticed :)
comeing- coming, relization- realization, delicat- delicate, and last, personally I'm not even sure about this one so my bad if I'm wrong, but is it made-up instead of makeuped?

Hey, it's nice. I like it. It's a first step towards an army of greatness! You did a good job, I can kinda picture myself there. I get the flashes, ya know? Still, next attempt will be better. Practice practice practice! Keep writing! We will keep reading.

Amazing! especially as it's your first short story, I am impressed

This speaks to me more than i want to. And yeah, it's the worst feeling that a person can ever feel. But at least you get to move on. You get to find someone new, someone better. And hopefully they won't tear the heart out again. Things will get better. They have to. Every down has its up. Every trough has its crest. Keep writing, we will keep reading.

That... it seems happy, but then I read again, and I get kinda sad :P.
Anyways, I like it! It's simplistic, but not, you know what I mean?
I hope you keep writing! We will keep reading!