United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
I've been keeping track of this series and the ending of this scene just blew my mind. I can't wait for the next one!
I love the idea of this story. It's unique and I believe it had a message. Just a side not but in pativular parts the story would get a little sloppy. Otherwise I really liked this peice.
The story is a good idea. However there were many errors, luckily they're very easy to fix. I noticed that your dialogue was a little mixed up, every time someone else talks you start a new line. Like this...
"How's you're day Julia?" Tom asked
"Very well thank you for asking" Responded Julia
Other than that the story was pretty good. I hope to see more from you.
The story itself was good, and cute. I noticed a few errors in the story though, which can be easily fixed. Very cute little story!
Whoa. This story is great. I really would like to see where this is going to lead. Great work!
I've been trying to keep up with this series in my small amounts of free time lately, I'd like to see where this could head.
While definitely interesting I found this story to be a rather good angle on a normal action.
I liked this poem and how it was put together. Good job, as always.