United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
The plot line of this story was fantastic. However there were many missing pieces and it made certain parts choppy and seemed to be skipped over. Besides that I really enjoyed this story!
The story has a common concept, one that nearly matches that of the very popular show most teens watch called Thirteen Reasons Why, which I'm guessing you based it on. There wasn't much of a build up and at times it was sloppy and difficult to read. However I think there is a really great story lying in here. Through practice and hard work this could become a very good piece of writing. Keep up the hard work!
Okay, this is a good idea. It's lovely, I like how you wrote from both points of view showing they both wanted to talk again. The only problem was there were a lot of grammatical errors which made the piece a little choppy to read. Overall though it was a cute story. I'd like to see more!
This story is good, however it is almost exactly like one I wrote before this...
Underneath all of the grammar mistakes and spelling errors there is a good story. Throughout the piece you make many errors such as punctuation, spelling, grammar, repeating, and hard to read descriptions. I don't say this to discourage you, this is a very good idea and I think with enough hard work and time you could reshape this into something amazing, but next time a little more care for errors. Overall it is a very creative idea. Keep writing!