TheForgotten

I really enjoyed this poem. I hope to see more of your peices in the future.

This peice is very honest, and relatable

Personally I felt the story was absolutely amazing. The idea was great, and the characters were fantastic, there's a lot of detail to each of their personalities. Good job! I look forward to future stories.

This poem expresses deep thought on a very sensitive subject, and I liked it a lot. I hope you continue to write amazing poems like this!

It's actually a rather good point that you bring up, I hadn't even thought about it before reading this.

Raw and unfiltered emotion.
I understand the feelings of heart break, not that of a break up but somewhere along those lines. It's hard at first but it does get better. Always know just because one person couldn't see how amazing you are that you're not worthless, they were just down right stupid. Stay strong through these rough times.

There's a few errors here and there but they are easily fixable. I really like this idea, please continue. (I love the mention of her eyes and the way he could tell her life is quite pleasant)

I really liked this poem, it flowed well and it had a sweet mother like feel to it. I believe it's a very relate able topic, suicide is often thought about daily for some. Good job!