Optimism101

Ohhhh boy. This is a good intro! It actually sets up a nice haunted-house-ghostbusters-luigi's-mansion-scooby-doo sorta story. Many different paths open, and many different options ahead.
However you say it's gonna have murder and stuff.
So scrap all that and replace it with some deep crap. Maybe some Us, and stuffs.
Otherwise, you got a nice setup!
Keep writing! And we will keep reading!

Wow. Transformation, and difference. Makes me wanna grab a hammer if ya know what I'm saying. Nice one! Glad to see you doing writes! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

Everyone does.
Don't know if it was intended, but the story has 123 words, which is pretty sweet.
Everyone breaks
You just gotta know how to piece yourself back together.

I feel like you could, and should. You mention Fate, but not like fate. You use it as a person, or a something. So that begs the question of what is doing this? I feel like you could go places with this one. Keep Writing! We will keep reading!

Yes, they would.

I like it! Genetic modification has wonders on a universe, not only that but you have managed to turn them into soldiers, it's wonderful! Very interesting. Shows everything from her perspective too, she hates what she is, what she's doing, but is powerless to stop it, whether by choice or force. That is at least how I see it. Keep writing! We will keep reading!

Oh my god yeah. Happens all the time. It's soo frustrating. Nice poem-story! It's a bit of both in my opinion, in yours, I might be wrong. Anyways, its very representative of the truth. Nice one! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

*insert deviation of "haha" here*
Funny, nice one.
A little overused, but you played it out in such a way that it kinda went away from the norm.
Good One!
Can't wait for the next one.
Keep writing! We will keep reading!