Optimism101

I feel like you could, and should. You mention Fate, but not like fate. You use it as a person, or a something. So that begs the question of what is doing this? I feel like you could go places with this one. Keep Writing! We will keep reading!

Oh my god yeah. Happens all the time. It's soo frustrating. Nice poem-story! It's a bit of both in my opinion, in yours, I might be wrong. Anyways, its very representative of the truth. Nice one! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

And so the romance-in-a-literal-almost-hellscape-world-filled-with-people-that-can-literaly-murder-you-instantly begins.

Hey, it's nice. I like it. It's a first step towards an army of greatness! You did a good job, I can kinda picture myself there. I get the flashes, ya know? Still, next attempt will be better. Practice practice practice! Keep writing! We will keep reading.

This speaks to me more than i want to. And yeah, it's the worst feeling that a person can ever feel. But at least you get to move on. You get to find someone new, someone better. And hopefully they won't tear the heart out again. Things will get better. They have to. Every down has its up. Every trough has its crest. Keep writing, we will keep reading.

That... it seems happy, but then I read again, and I get kinda sad :P.
Anyways, I like it! It's simplistic, but not, you know what I mean?
I hope you keep writing! We will keep reading!

I love this! I can never say this in reality, but you summarize it up and make it look so easily. I love it! I love it so much! Keep writing! We will keep reading!

I like another part. meeting the mentor. And kicking him in the nuts. That's cool too.