Optimism101

"Where are you now?" It's not a bad poem. It is a sort of chaotic, that connects to someones fear of losing them. Maybe one day you should try happy poems. I bet they would uplift more people than ever were down.

It doesn't particularly strike out as hard as I think you were going for. However, I know at least two people it's going to hit hard to. And even if it didn't strike me, I could still feel it's emotion.

It's really good! If you want to try and make it better, I reccomend adding more descriptions, to help me picture. Maybe more details about the lake, or him.

I get that. It's like a way to cover up your feelings without anyone knowing that's how you feel. Or it could be used to make an offensive joke. Either way.

Just Monika

I like it. It's... interesting. I have quite a few questions about the characters, all of which I'm sure to figure out from the story or what I can piece together. Either way, you've set up a pretty good dystopian (I think) society where you have the upper and lower class separated completely. I'll be waiting for the next bit. Keep writing! Because people will keep reading.

I liked this one. More questions, of course, but that's one of the benefits of short stories. A good part. Keep writing! Oh, if you need a girl name, I always liked Jessie.

Nothing seems too rushed. It works nicely. I can't wait for the next part. Soooo many questions! I'm sure all will be answered in good time. Keep writing!