United States • 23 y/o • MaleReviews Received
This story sounds like the beginning of something brilliant! I was a little confused as it progressed, but idrc, it'll probably make more sense later on. I can't wait to read more!
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The opening is poetic and the dialogue is plausible. Well done. Perhaps you could've spread the descriptions more evenly through the story but that's a minor quibble. Congratulations on your 50,000 hits.
this rhyming! it spoke right to my heart. keep at it! i can't wait to see what you write next
Bang on the head. Happens to me pretty much all the stories I write, like WHEREEEEEEE did this come from?!
This was a good story! I also understand the struggle of making a story yourself love then thinking it’s not good at all, but yeah, this is a good story! Keep up the work of writing, have a nice day, be safe.
This one was good a creepy! And I’m ready for anything, I got my bat ready for action! Keep up the work of writing! Have a nice day, be safe.
You could cut 'by any stretch of the imagination' and still convey the essential point. Nonetheless its a good portrayal of a man too proud to ask for help. Our culture puts a lot of pressure on us to be perfect but few if any of us are.
I like the way you tease at there being more to the story than what you show without making it too confusing to keep up with.