United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
this hits me but not terribly deep
I really feel this right now. Good job putting it into words. The boat analogy made a strong mental image.
Ooh, I actually really like this! It sounds like it should be a song.
this rhyming! it spoke right to my heart. keep at it! i can't wait to see what you write next
The wave metaphore is a good one.
Most people are going through big changes at eighteen, whether its university or your first job. Its understandable to feel worried about that. Just because things are rough now it doesn't mean they always will be. If one plan or ambition doesn't work out then another one might. The pandemic is making things hard now, but sooner or later society will come to terms with it. it may not be easy but if people couldn't get past crisis our species would've gone extinct long before now.
There was a recession when I was a teenager. Sometimes it seemed it would never end but it did. I was unemployed for a time but I found a good job, even though it took me years.
I like the way you tease at there being more to the story than what you show without making it too confusing to keep up with.
I'm not really sure what to say about this. Writing-wise, I like how it's all dialogue. I love how the tone of each voice shifts at the end.
It also made me feel sad. I couldn't quite relate to all the details, but I could definitely relate to the overall idea and feel.
It's wonderful writing, and you've given me something to think about.
Everything is great as it is. I loved reading it. Well done.