United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Not bad!
I like your description of the door, and the idea of currents in a room is interesting. You should've had a capital S at the start of Spanish, but overall this is good.
As in part one, the descriptions are vivid and you build suspense well.
Yes Thomas, this happens to other people. I seldom write out a plan beforehand and I don't always know when inspiration will strike. My stories don't always work out as I thought they might.
Even full time writers can jot down notes, give up on them and come back years later with better ideas of how to develop the idea. Perhaps you'll be able to finish something in the future when you can't see how to now.
Beautiful descriptions. Very nice work.
It...It...It fits too perfectly. I don't know what else to say.
This is just.. Like, it's so weird, and when I first read it, I just kinda thought it was weird abstract stuff, and while I still kinda think that, it's also got a story that I didn't notice before. Basically, what I'm trying to say is that it makes me smile, but also furrow my brow in confusion.
You did a really good job of keeping the action going the entire time. It was interesting to get inside the thief's mind. The cliffhanger at the end left me wanting to read more. Great job :)